Peer Reviewer: Blandine Simprevil

Author Reviewed:  Nicole Gelfman

 

Researched Critical Analysis Essay Peer Review #2

 

First Impressions

Does the title attract your attention? Why/why not? Does it clearly identify the author’s purpose and stance? Why/why not? Suggest at least one improvement in word choice or phrasing, or an alternative title.

 The title does attract my attention because it explains what her research paper will be about.

What type of introduction is this? (Narrative, Expository, etc…) Name two things you enjoyed and two areas for improvement.

Nicole’s introduction is expository. In her introduction , she gives a summary about the novel. She further explains why the main character feels the way he feels. I believe that her introduction should be a bit shorter .

Is there enough background information presented in the introduction? Is there any additional information needed to clarify the context of the primary source or the author’s thesis? 

There is a lot of background information presented in the introduction. There is no need to

Clarify the context of the primary source or the author’s thesis. 

Is there a clear thesis statement? What is it and where is it located? Can it be argued from supporting or opposing sides? 

There is a clear thesis statement in Nicole’s paper. It is located at the end of the introductory paragraph. It can be argued from supporting or opposing sides. 

Arrangement

Are there enough claims to fully support the thesis and convince readers that the argument is logical and valid? What other claims might the author make to strengthen their argument? 

There are enough claims to justify Nicole’s thesis and convince readers that the thesis is logical and valid. She should incorporate more claims from the book to strengthen their argument.

Does the arrangement of claims flow in a logical and persuasive manner? Describe the progression of ideas.

The arrangement of claims flow in a logical and persuasive manner. I also like the facts that she explains her claims in a chronological order. She explains her claims as she progresses through the summary of the novel  

Is every claim clearly and fully explained? Are there any areas where you were confused? What additional explanations or phrasing would improve clarity and comprehension for the reader?

I must commend Nicole on the way she explained her claims. They were precise and there was no room for confusion.

Are there any paragraphs or sections that need to be moved to different locations? Which ones and where should they be placed?

 No. The paragraphs are  in the correct location 

Does the writer successfully transition throughout each paragraph? Are there any transitional words or phrases that are overused? Suggest at least one additional phrase they can use.

The writer successfully transitions throughout each paragraph. However, she should use more transitional words like “ Additionally, furthermore, then, as a result, consequently, etc..” 

Does the writer transition successfully from paragraph to paragraph?  Are there topic sentences strong and clearly linked to the focus of each paragraph? 

Nicole’s paragraph transitions are very successful. They are clearly linked to the focus of each paragraph. 

Research

Is each claim fully supported with proof from the primary source?  Are there any claims which require more evidence?   

Each claim is fully supported with proof for the novel 

Is there enough supporting data from outside sources for each major claim? What kind of data do they use? 

There is not enough supporting data from outside sources for each major claim. She mostly refers to the novel/. They use the novel and book reviews about the novel to explain their claim. 

Is the supporting data fully explained and clearly linked back to the author’s claim and/or thesis?  Where do they need to clarify or explain further?

 The supporting data is fully explained and clearly linked back to the author’s claims and thesis.

Is any data/information missing, or interpreted in a way that seems confusing or incorrect? 

There is no information missing or interpreted in a way that seems confusing. 

Is every quote, statistic, or image properly labeled and cited using MLA format?

Every citation in this paper is labeled with the with the correct MLA format. 

Counterarguments

How does the author engage with counterarguments?  Are they embedded into each paragraph or is there a separate section that only deals with counterarguments.

There isn’t really a counterargument in this paper. 

Do the author’s rebuttals seem logical and persuasive?  Why/why not?  Suggest another idea for a counterargument(s) that the author might employ. 

In Conclusion

Is the conclusion clear and impactful?  Why/Why not?  Does it reinforce the thesis and major claims in their argument?  

The conclusion isn’t quite clear because it hasn’t been developed yet.

Are you convinced by the conclusion?  Why or why not?  What else did you want to know?  

It hasn’t been developed yet. 

What is the writer’s overall tone and how do they achieve this?  Is the tone consistent throughout the essay? 

The writer’s overall tone is quite persuasive. The use of literary terms and vivid details help the reader understand their point of view on the topic. The tone is very consistent throughout the essay. 

What did you enjoy most about reading this essay? Name at least two aspects.

I really enjoyed the summary of the novel. I loved the way she made me understand what was going on in the mind of the main character Meursault. I also admired the fact she gave a lot of background information so I could fully understand the purpose of this essay. She is an excellent writer ! 

Where should the writer focus most to improve their work? Name two areas. 

I think that Nicole should shorten the length of her paragraphs. She needs to also construct a counterargument to her claims.